new update! *happy* thank you, it's the best way to begin the day!
on a more constructive note, wittyilynamed is quite right, it does feel a little rushed... And I'm sorry, but I find it surprising that Anderson manages to keep hold of his badge during all the adventure, but not his cell phone? (all police officers should have one, shouldn't they?) In the same way, after having disappeared like that during service, he should probably have also phoned his colleagues as soon as possible, ie at the old man's (I wonder if my new year resolution to comment a lot more and try to give constructive criticism will be liked...)
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Date: 2009-01-02 07:47 am (UTC)on a more constructive note, wittyilynamed is quite right, it does feel a little rushed... And I'm sorry, but I find it surprising that Anderson manages to keep hold of his badge during all the adventure, but not his cell phone? (all police officers should have one, shouldn't they?) In the same way, after having disappeared like that during service, he should probably have also phoned his colleagues as soon as possible, ie at the old man's
(I wonder if my new year resolution to comment a lot more and try to give constructive criticism will be liked...)